Following on from my earlier post, here’s an attempt at a postmodern poem around the same theme, in response to the prompt over at d’Verse poets today.
Autumn unfolding
A walk in the morning sunshine, camera in hand. Everything seems bright and newly washed after yesterday’s rain. I feel more alive than I have for days, weeks even. I love this time of year, well when the sun shines, at least.
Where the new fern unfurls
amongst fallen leaves,
squirrel-discarded chestnuts,
moss and broken twigs,
autumn is unfolding.
I walk in search of the red oak on the island. But the gardeners catch up with me, and it’s all a myth, the tree is a sycamore…Acer rubrum..
The naming of things
wonderful in Latin
Acer rubrum,
Pteridium,
Castanea,
Macrolepiota,
et cetera
That wasn’t very poetic, I’ve run out of steam. I could go on, with my butterfly mind, leaping from one idea to the next, and writing better verse, or worse. But I think I’ll leave it at that…Tomorrow is another day.
ha, we both brought the rain a bit…or al least the remnants….i like the alliteration in new fern unfurls
amongst fallen leaves,…also the naming of things is pretty cool…we give it significance…let your butterfly mind flit on…you did well…smiles….enjoyed the walk in the great outdoors…
Haha, I’m glad you thought the naming of things was cool…it took me a moment to find the Latin names for the things I had mentioned in the first part!
Quite good–and quite poetic, in spite of your denial. And very clever to end the Latin list with “et cetera.” Made me smile real big!
Very nice et cetera!
I’m glad you left this as is.. it is beautiful. The thoughts, the poetry… I smiled at the gardener catching up with you and dashing your romantic thoughts on the red tree…Lovely.
The prose gives a real sense that we are walking along with you, privy to your thoughts. Also it creates a strong sense of voice and character within a short space. What beautiful pictures and I love how you spun out the end into the Latin, gorgeous.
smiles…i saw a squirrel in the forest yesterday…a bit of magic… cool on the inclusion of the latin words…castanea…doesn’t it sound beautifully elegant..i like
Until the last paragraph–where you threw in the towel–I thought it was wonderful!
Thanks!
I like the poetic techniques mixed into the prose – a kind of autumn stew..enhancing body and mind. Very enjoyable.
Poetic autumn stew…now there’s a phrase coined!
I love the ending! Very, very clever.
I really love the ending, I think it was a perfect place to stop. As a gardener myself, I am always enchanted by the names of plants, autumn is quite unfolded here, and it looks fabulous.