Tonight, the prompt at d’Verse is a sense of place…well, this isn’t a new poem, but one I wrote a while ago that, I hope, is fitting.
Commarque
Through the dense trees
a glimpse
fragments of old walls
golden in the filtered sun
Then a vision
of towers, an archway
crumbling
tantalisingly close
But unreachable.
I have a love of all things old and mysterious, and this came to me years after visiting an old castle in France, hidden in the woods. I find that it has now been somewhat restored and you have to pay to get in. Back then, you just scrambled through woods along the rough paths….far more fun.
Very fitting…I’ve had similar experiences of discovering an old castle in the woods in Brittany many years ago…you took me right back there. Nice descriptions.
Thanks, glad you liked the description!
oh i love it too…and it speaks of adventure to me….just out of reach, i think i might find a way even if i have to crawl under or around a few things…smiles…
Always best when you have to find a way in….glad it spoke of adventure.
Looks like a wonderful place to sit and write… even looking at the picture inspires me. Love your ending…
very cool…been to france several times and we have some castle ruins around here as well..nice discovery trip…thanks for taking us there..
Oh, I love it when you are free to roam all over old buildings like that. Paying to get in to see it somehow removes the mystery and magic in a way.
Lovely.
I want to go there now and take a look for myself. You’ve made it sound so inviting.
Wonderfully descriptive. I’d love to see the castle!
Yes, fun to explore, but as you said, “unreachable”: the history in which the walls weren’t crumbling but decorated with tapestries (except in imagination, of course!).
It’s true Sue! It’s more fun when it was ‘in the wild’ trekking up a jungle path than driving right up to the doorstep. Thanks for sharing! Great take!
Hank
Really like this. You convey the character and the spirit of the place superbly in just a few lines.
Many thanks for comment – I often think I don’t write enough, but as long as the message is getting across in a short poem, I’m happy!
A teasing taste of exploration… oh to scramble around such a place with my camera and notebook!
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This is lovely, Sue. The poem is perfect for the photo. Very atmospheric.
Many thanks, Sandra
Thanks for the note on my button poem. Didn’t find a button poem here; but loved this very much. Took me to that serendipitous discovery of all things old. Like finding camelot or Lancelot’s castle!
This goes so well withe magical photo. What place, of which your poem gives a great sense for.